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Title: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bronwyn on November 23, 2004, 06:36:31 PM: be gentle! /hides

;D
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Evaine Dian on November 23, 2004, 07:11:36 PM: I like it a lot, bascially because I'm always interested in what life might be like after the end of BG2, and because it contains all the things that are dear to me :)

(One little comment: I think it was a little difficult to read, maybe it would be more eye-friendly, if you divided it up into more paragraphs?)

I'm curious how this story might go on!

EDIT: I also like your detailed description of this winter morning. I can imagine it very well. Somehow I get some kind of sentimental Christmas feeling right now, which is very unusual for me. Good work, Bronwyn :)
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bronwyn on November 23, 2004, 08:38:16 PM: Quote from: Evaine Dian on November 23, 2004, 07:11:36 PM

(One little comment: I think it was a little difficult to read, maybe it would be more eye-friendly, if you divided it up into more paragraphs? )

Will do! Thanks and I'm glad you liked :)
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: jcompton on November 23, 2004, 10:40:34 PM: We know about the curtains... but surely adventure and/or peril must lurk! I await the adventure and/or peril. :)
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bronwyn on November 24, 2004, 09:55:51 AM: Quote from: jcompton on November 23, 2004, 10:40:34 PM
We know about the curtains... but surely adventure and/or peril must lurk! I await the adventure and/or peril. :)

you command and I obey!
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Evaine Dian on November 24, 2004, 10:29:45 AM: Quote from: Bronwyn on November 24, 2004, 09:55:51 AM
Quote from: jcompton on November 23, 2004, 10:40:34 PM
We know about the curtains... but surely adventure and/or peril must lurk! I await the adventure and/or peril. :)

you command and I obey!

Well, I know that it was meant to be a joke, but don't let it get you down, it's your story, you can write what you want, you don't have to "obey".

Hu, it's getting pretty exciting now!
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bronwyn on November 24, 2004, 01:58:10 PM: well I wasn't really serious I already had the next part written before I saw it anyways ;D
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: celticrose on December 31, 2004, 12:45:46 AM: I just read the first (?) installment of your story. . . I enjoyed it, it has just the right amount of detail, found myself looking around for Rose Tea & Herbed Bread! I thought it flowed nicely.
I see you also use the "cliff-hanger" method!!!! ;) Soooo, how soon can we find out what happens??
Anxiously Waiting. . . baitted breath & all ( runs to get a breath mint).
Celtic Rose
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bronwyn on February 15, 2005, 05:34:11 PM: I really do intend to post another installment to it someday, I've just been very distracted since the holidays. I'm glad you like it :)
Title: Re: Comments on "For A Bard's Love"
Post by: Bons on April 17, 2005, 05:36:43 PM: Very belated commenting, but much time has passed, and I'd like to see what happens next. So... prod, prod.

I'd suggest editing the punctuation in some of the dialogue, but I very much like the descriptive passages, such as the introductory winter morning and the "Serpent in the Snow" segment.