Posted by: Bons
« on: April 17, 2005, 05:36:43 PM »Very belated commenting, but much time has passed, and I'd like to see what happens next. So... prod, prod.
I'd suggest editing the punctuation in some of the dialogue, but I very much like the descriptive passages, such as the introductory winter morning and the "Serpent in the Snow" segment.
I'd suggest editing the punctuation in some of the dialogue, but I very much like the descriptive passages, such as the introductory winter morning and the "Serpent in the Snow" segment.