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Offline Nesquaam

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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #25 on: April 21, 2004, 10:04:52 AM »
Quote from: discharger12 on April 20, 2004, 03:37:17 PM
I don't think I should really continue my story, it seems to make people look down at me in shame  :-\

Don't let them get you down. It's your story, and if you like it's it's good.
If you write something it's supposed to be fun for the writer, and if it's fun for the reader; well, that's just a bonus.
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #26 on: April 21, 2004, 12:41:41 PM »
indeed
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #27 on: April 21, 2004, 03:31:36 PM »
There is also that story with the guy who trys to do what everyone says, then dies at the end or something..

The point was, you can't please everyone :)

Thanks Alarielle and Nesquaam
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #28 on: April 21, 2004, 06:03:49 PM »
Quote from: discharger12 on April 21, 2004, 06:46:22 AM
And the confusing thing- about jumping from place to place, don't worry, this is the last time he falls asleep.


Ah good- he was starting to resemble my life a little too much (in terms of confusion at least) :).
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #29 on: April 22, 2004, 06:50:36 AM »
I am happy to announce that MorningGlory of the FW forums has given me a hand in giving the story a major makeover. It now has near perfect spelling/grammer, and I'm sure it will be a big hit :)

Hopefully anyway.

I'll load it up sometime to day
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #30 on: April 22, 2004, 12:37:20 PM »
Okay, everything is ready, read it if you wish.
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #31 on: April 22, 2004, 01:57:20 PM »
Quote from: discharger12 on April 10, 2004, 01:16:03 PM
Part III



"Valygar volunteered to go to a stream he saw a bit back to catch some fish. (Who can resist the scrumptious fishies, I wonder?)"



For some reason, that strikes me as hilarious!   :D
Don't quite writing, it's pretty interesting!  :)
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Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #32 on: September 14, 2004, 04:35:44 PM »
Hey, just wanted to drop a line and say that this has to be one of the funniest stories that I have ever read.  It is also orginal than any on fanfiction.net.  Keep up the good work.  

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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #33 on: November 01, 2004, 06:33:39 PM »
After some thinking, I decided to continue the story. Because I don't have alot of free-time with the computer I can't really work on it.


Maybe in the future.  :)


And thanks for all the compliments, it really motivates the soul  ;)
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #34 on: November 02, 2004, 08:25:15 PM »
Quote from: Echani on November 01, 2004, 06:33:39 PM
After some thinking, I decided to continue the story. Because I don't have alot of free-time with the computer I can't really work on it.
My Jedi senses detect a missing word somewhere. Just as things were getting interesting too :(

And I just summoned the image of Valygar in Naughty Leather recalling the story...
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #35 on: November 04, 2004, 06:34:57 PM »
Quote from: Veloxyll on November 02, 2004, 08:25:15 PM
Quote from: Echani on November 01, 2004, 06:33:39 PM
After some thinking, I decided to continue the story. Because I don't have alot of free-time with the computer I can't really work on it.
My Jedi senses detect a missing word somewhere. Just as things were getting interesting too :(

And I just summoned the image of Valygar in Naughty Leather recalling the story...

Urm.. is this an insult?
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #36 on: November 04, 2004, 06:44:20 PM »
Nope,  no insult. Just three seperate statements. The first is to the rather contradictory nature of the quoted post
The second is sadness at not getting more (assuming that you're not continuing)
The Third just happened all on it's own and I thought it was worth sharing.
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #37 on: November 05, 2004, 08:52:34 PM »
Quote from: Veloxyll on November 04, 2004, 06:44:20 PM
Nope,  no insult. Just three seperate statements. The first is to the rather contradictory nature of the quoted post
The second is sadness at not getting more (assuming that you're not continuing)
The Third just happened all on it's own and I thought it was worth sharing.

Oh, I see now. This makes me feel much better.  ;)

I think I should really wrap up the story because I'm rapidly running out of ideas. I don't want to go wild with sexual lesbian things, mostly because I don't want Bons to beat me with an Ugly stick. And I wouldn't be surprised if some women here hate me because of this story. That is unless they don't already hate me for other things.  ::)
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #38 on: November 06, 2004, 07:48:37 AM »
Vaylgar-Minsc acshun!  ;D
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Re: Comments on "Where o' where can Aerie and Viconia be?"
« Reply #39 on: December 09, 2005, 08:29:09 PM »
I’m incredibly sorry that it took so long for me to start writing on this again. I actually did make a Part IV last year, but my computer was wiped, and the person I sent it to lost it, and decided that he was fairly busy. After finding a new editor, I wrote a second Part IV, but the person stopped coming to the forum and my computer got wiped again! So, finally, I’ve decided to take heart and work on this after so long. Again, I’m sorry for promising something I didn’t accomplish. On time, that is.

Oh, and the story is not complete in the least. I have no idea when I will finish it, because the only I idea I have for an ending will make anyone who reads it angry.

Quote from: cliffette on April 21, 2004, 06:03:49 PM
Quote from: discharger12 on April 21, 2004, 06:46:22 AM
And the confusing thing- about jumping from place to place, don't worry, this is the last time he falls asleep.


Ah good- he was starting to resemble my life a little too much (in terms of confusion at least) :).

And sorry, Cliffette. If you want to read this again, you will sadly be disappointed. :P
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