Pirengle--I got a foam finger from you? Awesome.
Description is something I struggle with, as my tendency is to be spare with prose. Definitely something I'm working on.
I can see some places where I can describe more fully without giving matters away too early in the story, so I'll play with that a bit. And, yes, Malik is adrift in some deep waters. I don't think he'll be able to swim.
Perdita--It could be an alternate timeline, I suppose.
But, no, Malik has met Bodhi. He just doesn't remember her. I like the idea of something like this happening as a prequel, though... hmmm...
JC--A cake? (*scratches head*) I can tell I'm missing a fun story here.
Thanks, folks, for your wonderful comments. I wasn't sure how well this story would go over, so the response here is encouraging.