JC--Yes, as I read the different threads in your Nalia forum, I become aware of how much I'm clinging to an old interpretation. (I think it's still whatever I decided on my first game.) But, hey, it's not the important bit of the story here, so I'm not too concerned.
I'm glad marginalizing Barek worked for you. I think I've gone off writing the Bhaalspawn as major character. Done too much of it, maybe.
Cliffette--I agree about the rushed feel. In fact, thinking back on it, the beginning bit took about four days to write (not including time spent thinking), and the second bit took fifteen minutes.
I think the reasoning there was that I was afraid of going overboard with Isaea's character and making him into too much of a caricature. I'm planning on going back and fleshing things out when I have a moment, hopefully soon.
Perdita--Oh, I don't know. If he were a Tickle-Me-Isaea doll, she might find him entertaining. Ooh, never mind. What a bad mental image I've just had.
I wasn't terribly comfortable with writing Isaea's POV, but I guess that's the fun of it.
Lord Kain--Heh, I'm sure he would enjoy that more if he weren't a doll. Though I'm sure he'd see much more of her that way.
Thanks, everyone! I'm glad that you've enjoyed the read, and I really appreciate your thoughtful comments!