Comments on "Many Waters"

[Moreina]

Ajnos:
     Happy to see you're back.
     I liked this. The present-tense, third-person perspective provides a refreshing break from the usual. I also liked that there was a definite ending and the idea that the statues might still be there after fifteen years, freezing <Charname> the way she was before she became a goddess. It is also a nice touch that the reader knows that she chose godhood over mortality without being told specifically.

[Perdita]

It is just so sad.      How can you compete with a Goddess, or, worse yet, the unchanging perfect memory of a Goddess?

Well done.

[jcompton]

I liked it before, still like it.

It is just so sad.      How can you compete with a Goddess, or, worse yet, the unchanging perfect memory of a Goddess?

It does throw into sharp relief something that's been mentioned to me before: Virtually without exception, stories that deal with Kelsey after TOB portray him as less-than-happy.

[Ajnos]

Ajnos:
     Happy to see you're back.
     I liked this. The present-tense, third-person perspective provides a refreshing break from the usual. I also liked that there was a definite ending and the idea that the statues might still be there after fifteen years, freezing <Charname> the way she was before she became a goddess. It is also a nice touch that the reader knows that she chose godhood over mortality without being told specifically.

Thanks, glad to be back.  I did struggle with keeping the tense straight so I'm glad it didn't seem forced. 

It is just so sad.      How can you compete with a Goddess, or, worse yet, the unchanging perfect memory of a Goddess?

Well done.

Thank you.  It is sad and Charname has to be the worst ex ever...  I blame the epilogues though, Jason is the one who matched him up with Busya.

I liked it before, still like it.

It does throw into sharp relief something that's been mentioned to me before: Virtually without exception, stories that deal with Kelsey after TOB portray him as less-than-happy.

Thanks.  ...  Actually, Half-Empty was my Kelsey-happily-ever-after story.

[jcompton]

Actually, Half-Empty was my Kelsey-happily-ever-after story.

Yeah, I think that was the point. That's about as good as it gets.

[Ajnos]

Actually, Half-Empty was my Kelsey-happily-ever-after story.

Yeah, I think that was the point. That's about as good as it gets.

Hmph.  Yeah, but Kirwond had a story about him and the allergic ranger, it was happy and it might have even been after ToB.  They do exist, besides I still maintain you started it. 

[jcompton]

Yeah, BG2 Redux has been mentioned as the major exception, but given its tone we weren't led to expect anything too horrible.

And, yeah, I realize that I started it.

[Ajnos]

Yeah, BG2 Redux has been mentioned as the major exception, but given its tone we weren't led to expect anything too horrible.

And, yeah, I realize that I started it.

Hm.  Not that one I meant When Forests Attack...the one with all the rabbits and the sneezing.  Happy Endings abounded.   

[cliffette]

I remember commenting on this when you first posted it and being put off by the tense, but now I realise I was just nitpicking 
It's perfect. 

And Jason, Kelsey had a gooey happy ending with Imoen and Kimoen (the baby) in my it-never-quite-got-to-the-point-or-in-fact-,-climax "An Absolute Waste of Time" 

[jcompton]

Ah, I'd forgotten that one, beg pardon.

[jcompton]

Oh. And that seems to not be here. Can you fix that, Cliffette?

[Domi]

Oh. And that seems to not be here. Can you fix that, Cliffette?

And with the next chapter to boot? Please?

[Bex]

IIt does throw into sharp relief something that's been mentioned to me before: Virtually without exception, stories that deal with Kelsey after TOB portray him as less-than-happy.

An elaboration on the happily-ever-after story is over before it begins, and it's easier to write a story with some kind of dramatic tension when there's conflict. There's still the possibility to wring a plot from a happier union, but I don't think it's nearly as compelling a subject.

As for this story, the melancholy note it hits is perfect. There's really little else to say.