One: Is there a 'clique' here that new readers/posters should be aware of?
As with alasafan, you seem to be missing that this is not the "good faith best effort" of the authors. At least, not the best effort to create something good.
Ah, so there is a 'clique', as I don't know anyone here well enough to realize what is your 'style' and what is a 'joke style'. It has nothing to do with me 'missing' anything. The fact that posters here are given good critiques - all nicey, kittens and cupcakes comments - seems a bit off-putting.
No one here writes *that* good that it can't be improved upon.
The only things I'm missing here, Jason, are good spelling, decent grammar and THIS CRAP OF WRITING WITH THE CAPSLOCK KEY ENGAGED. If *any* of this is funny (Corvis and alasafan), I don't see it at all. Being forced to stumble through someone's horrible spelling and grammar tends to create a break in whatever ambiance the author is cooking. When I can't comprehend WTF is being written and conveyed, I lose interest and am unable to find any hint of 'story'. This is jarring for a reader who is 'into' the plot.
The truly sad part IMO is that this bit of fluff would've gotten a high grade in school, a B+ at the very least.
It makes me want to copy the style and see if I can't get better recognition as a professional writer.
Almost.